Sample #1
Done well:
Identified most of the shots and explained the meaning and connection to the extract in the essay.
The essay was written well. It wasn't to short but not too long and kept it brief by getting straight to the point and not listing. Good length of the paragraphs and good introductions and endings to paragraphs. Good grammar, little to no mistakes.
Connected the techniques that were used and showed their meaning and their contribution to the extract.
Could be improved:
Used the letter “w” instead of with
They missed a coupe shot for example they didn't mention the POV shot of the woman.
In the essay they missed the message that the director tried to show through the shower head.
Sample #2
Done well:
‘wrote the essay without listing and elabortated in characters feeling well
Great vocabulary
Descriptive over the feelings that are felt in the film
Could be improved:
Could've written more detail
Lack of detail for shots and writes about angles vaguely
Uses vague terms such as “primarily” and “combination”
Partners essay review:
Good:
Well written and good vocabulary
Good transitions and got most of the scenes and meanings.
Improve:
Should've started with a simple summary about the extract.
With more detail and could've show more shots and gone more into detail about their meanings and techniques
Feedback on my essay
Couldve used better grammar
Should've shown more scenes and gone more into detail
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